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New World Order, Chapter 7: Promised Fulfilled (Brock) — 3 Comments

  1. Yay! Great job on getting the formatting to work. I\’m really proud of you!

    I like this chapter. It feels like we\’re getting a better feel for the characters, and for the impending conflict. I like Brock a lot, and especially his rapport with the others. Brava!

  2. Oh, this is lovely. The descriptions of the house and the people are wonderful. Those ladies (one a warrior!) are fabulous. Their banter is so perfect. Brock\’s assessment of the quilt\’s eventual owner aligned with my hopes. Why did he steal the fabric scrap? Ooh! It was cool how he made good suggestions. I absolutely adore Brock! His bribe was cute, too. And on a serious note, the idea of the Gary\’s having one of the daggers is excellent storytelling. I look forward to more!

  3. I love all the little things about this chapter. The painting of the house including renewing the wards, Edith\’s skills, the relationships between the women and how Brock sees them all. The Gary\’s having one of the daggers is a great story hook and Belinda not having a clue just makes it more interesting. Very nicely done!